“Ah...feels good to be home!”
A boy hopped out of the car with a sigh, smiling with his backpack strapped on. He was a 10-year-old with short brown hair, and wore a white T-shirt with blue shorts.
“It sure does...”
His younger sister wasn’t far behind. The 9-year-old had black hair that was tied in a ponytail, wearing a pale-yellow T-shirt with beige shorts.
“Home is awesome! Ha ha ha!”
The youngest of them by far, a 4-year-old girl in a pink dress with medium-length brown hair, exuberantly jumped in place.
“Okay guys, inside,” their mother spoke. Her medium-length hair was brown like the oldest and youngest of her children.
“Yeah, Suzie, move it!” the boy said to the younger of his two sisters.
“Okie dokie!” She dashed to the front door.
The four of them were soon within the walls of their house; Suzie ran elsewhere as the other two kids took their shoes and backpacks off.
“So, you guys want your diapers now?”
“Yeah!” “Yes please!” Brother and sister nodded their heads, grinning.
Mom, smiling, handed her two older children a piece of padding.
“Here you go...and here’s yours.”
“Thanks...” “Thank you!”
“You’re welcome!”
While the daughter quickly sped off to change, the son just stood there, frowning.
“Um, Mom...this’s one of Elli’s diapers.”
“I know, Greg, but I couldn’t find yours anywhere.” Mom frowned as well.
“Did’ja check everywhere?”
“Of course I did, but I must have misplaced them...you’ll just have to settle for one of Elise’s.”
“Dang it...” Greg slightly blushed as he walked away.
Once in the bathroom and away from prying eyes, he took off his shorts and underwear, replacing them with the pink, feminine diaper.
(C’mon...!)
Greg desperately tried to put his shorts back on, but his padding proved to be too big for it; he eventually gave up after about a minute.
(Augh! I can’t believe this!)
Grumbling, he left the bathroom with his removed clothes bundled in his arms, heading to the garage.
“Ha ha ha! Greggy’s a big sissy!” Suzie taunted, giggling and pointing at his pink padding.
“Am not!”
“Are too! Now you jus’ need a dressy an’ you’ll be all girly like us!”
“Get lost, Suzie!”
“‘kay!” She obeyed, still grinning.
Once Greg placed his clothes in the bin in the garage, he made his way upstairs and into his other sister’s room. She too had her diaper exposed, as she lay on the floor and read a book.
“Elli, have you seen my diapers?” he asked.
“Not really,” she replied, eyes still on the pages in front of her.
“You sure?”
“Positive. You must’ve used ‘em all, ‘cause I sure haven’t hidden them anywhere...”
The falsely-innocent smile on Elise’s face evoked anger within her brother.
“Yeah you did! I wanna know where they are!” he demanded.
“You’ve already got one on, so why’re you worrying about needing more?”
“‘cause I don’ wanna wear this stupid thing!”
Elise shook her head, still smiling. “Oh Greg, it’s not like anyone’s gonna see you wearing it...”
“You an’ Suzie will!”
“And we make fun of you for a bunch of other stuff, so it’s no big deal. Besides...”
Elise stood up and gave her brother a gentle double-pat on the back of his diaper.
“I think they fit you quite well! Heh heh heh!” She chuckled.
Greg clenched his fists and shook with rage, leering at his sister.
“Elli...I swear I’m gonna get my revenge...”
“Okay.” She didn’t look intimidated.
“You’ll be sorry!” he warned as he stomped out of his sister’s room.
(She knows none’a my pants fit when I’m wearing diapers! I’m gonna teach ‘er not to mess with me!)
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Greg wandered the backyard, hand on his chin, as he thought of how to get back at Elise.
(There’s so many options...but what to choose...?)
His pondering resulted in quite a variety of potential pranks, but he couldn’t quite decide what was best.
“Hmm-hm-hmmm...”
Greg then saw Suzie walking nearby, humming to herself with a big smile on her face.
“Hey Suzie...” he greeted.
“Heya! Wanna watch bugs wit’ me?”
“Eh...sure, why not?” He shrugged.
“Yay!”
Suzie beamed, taking her brother by the hand and leading him around the backyard.
“Ya sure ya don’ wanna be a sissy?” she asked.
“Yes, Suzie, I’m sure.” Greg frowned, looking irritated.
“Okay...but yer missin’ out!”
“I don’t think I’m missin’ anything...”
“Dressies, dollies, pink, glitter, ponies...” Suzie happily listed off.
Greg cringed. “Eugh...you can keep it. All of it.”
“Hee hee!”
The two siblings soon came upon a patch of dirt.
“Ooh! Look! A wormy!”
Suzie, grinning ear-to-ear, squatted down to look at the worm squiggle about.
“Yeah...I see it...” Greg wasn’t nearly as enthused.
“Heh heh...you t’ink I should keep it?”
“Prolly not. Mom wouldn’t like it; you should just leave it alone.”
“Awww...” Suzie frowned as she still observed it.
(Huh...maybe...)
“Is it okay if I pick it up?”
“Sure...” Suzie replied, unsure what her brother was doing.
Greg picked up the worm with his thumb and index finger, dropping it into his other hand.
“Greggy...what’cha doin’?” she asked, standing back up.
“It’s a secret,” he responded, smiling.
“I don’ t’ink Mommy’ll be happy if you keep da wormy...”
“I’m not keepin’ him, I’m borrowing him. Once I’m done, I’ll put him back here.”
“Oh! Okay!” Suzie smiled.
“Just don’t tell Mom or Elli, okay?”
“‘kay!” She nodded.
Greg cupped the worm with both hands as he went back inside, looking out for anyone else that might ask what he was holding.
(All clear...)
Going upstairs, he peeked into Elise’s room; it was uninhabited, much to his joy.
(Perfect!)
Quickly and quietly, Greg placed the worm onto the partially-filled homework assignment resting on his sister’s desk, and went to his room.
“Heh heh heh...” He grinned in expectation.
Keeping a close eye on the upstairs hallway, he eventually witnessed Elise exit the bathroom and enter her room.
“Mmmmgh...Nnnn...”
Greg snickered to himself when he heard his sister’s barely-contained disgust and swift footsteps downstairs; he followed her just far enough behind so she wouldn’t notice.
“Aaaack! Gross! Yuck!”
Elise, upon dropping the worm on the backyard grass, wiped her hands on her shirt with a revolted look on her face.
“Ohhhhhh...” Suzie spoke in realization. “Dat’s what da wormy was for...”
“What?!”
Elise, noticing that her younger sister’s gaze went past her, turned around to see Greg waving with a proudly-guilty grin on his face.
“Rrrrrrrrr...!” She growled and glared at him.
“I just wanted to share Suzie’s discovery with you. How’d ya like it?”
“I didn’t!” Elise angrily replied.
“Sorry to hear that...” Greg frowned. “I thought you’d get a kick outta it...”
“The only kick I wanna do is right on your butt!”
“Go ahead; the diaper’ll protect me.” He smiled.
“Greg...!”
He dashed back to his room, grinning as his heart raced from his furiously-fast footwork. When he looked back upon reaching his destination, he expected Elise to be right behind him, but there was no one there.
(Phew...)
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Greg sat at his desk, going over his homework, when he heard someone humming ever closer.
“Hmm?”
He turned his head to see Suzie walking into his room.
“Heya Su--”
Greg then took in the noxious odor radiating from her.
“Ugh! Go get changed!”
“Dat’s your job, ‘member?” Suzie reminded, smiling with her tongue slightly sticking out.
“But it’s Elli’s turn! Go bug her!” He pointed out of his room, still looking grossed out.
“I can’t find ‘er anywhere! You gots’ta t’ange me!”
“Nuh-uh! No way!” Greg stubbornly shook his head, crossing his arms.
“But Greggy...if you don’ t’ange me, I’ll get a rash, an’ den I’ll hafta go to da hopsital, an’ you’ll be cryin’ an’ cryin’, ‘cause you could’a t’anged me...”
Suzie frowned and sorrowfully looked at her big brother with her hands behind her back.
“I’m not fallin’ for it, Suzie!”
“But I’ll ‘till get a rash...don’cha care ‘bout me?”
The baby sister’s continued pity-gaze made Greg sigh in defeat.
“Fine...I’ll do it...but Elli’s got the next two times, got it?”
“Yay! I gets t’anged by my bestest brudder in da whole world!”
Suzie joyously jogged in place as her brother got out of his chair.
“C’mon...let’s get this over with...”
“Okie doke!”
Greg took his little sister’s hand and led her to her room. There, he grabbed a fresh diaper and laid her down onto the changing mat resting on the floor.
“Don’ forget da powder!”
“I won’t! Jeez...”
He moved the front of Suzie’s dress onto her face (which made her snicker), exposing her diaper. Greg took a deep breath as he cautiously opened the tabs...
“Yeuuuugh...” He cringed as he cleaned his sister up.
“Hee hee hee!”
“What the heck are you eating?” Greg complained.
“Food,” she coyly answered.
“Suzie...”
“Does it matter? It always ends up in da same place!”
“I guess not...”
“Didn’ t’ink so!” She stuck her tongue out, smiling.
Greg dashed a fair amount of baby powder onto Suzie’s rear, and then fastened the fresh diaper onto her.
“There...you’re good to go, sis.”
He sighed in relief as he used a wipe to clean his hands, while his sister stood up and smiled.
“T’ank you for t’anging me, big brudder.”
Suzie pecked Greg on the cheek; he blushed and nervously smiled in response.
“D-Don’ mention it...”
She was about to dash off, when...
“Wait!”
Suzie stopped, looking confused at her big brother.
“Wha?”
“What’s that?” He pointed to a paper-like item sticking out of her dress pocket.
“Nothin’,” she suspiciously replied, stuffing it back in.
“Suzie, lemme see it.” Greg extended his right arm, palm open.
“No.” She shook her head. “Don’ wanna.”
“I think I deserve to know after what I just went through!”
“Ohhh...‘kay...”
Suzie, frowning, reluctantly took it out and handed it to her brother.
“Where the heck did’ja find a $5 bill?!” Greg shockingly replied.
“Daycare.”
“And who dropped it?”
“A rich kid, prolly.”
“Suzie...” Greg skeptically, sternly looked at her.
“What? Five bucks is nothin’ to a rich kid!”
“Tell me where you really got it.”
“Mmmm...Elli gave it to me.”
He furrowed his brows. “Lemme guess...she paid you to get outta changin’ that nasty diaper of yours?”
“Yup!” Suzie nodded, smiling.
“Well, you tell her that she’s got two diapers a’yours to make up for it, an’ that bribes ain’t gonna work next time!”
“‘kay! By da way, I’ll a’cept your money too!” She grinned.
“Yeah, yeah...”
“Yah!” Suzie yanked the $5 bill out of her brother’s hands and dashed out of her room.
(I’m gettin’ real sick’a Elli’s games...if she keeps insistin’ on prankin’ me, I’ll just hafta show ‘er that Greg’s not one to pass up an opportunity for payback!)
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“Suzie...” Mom spoke.
“Yes Mommy?” She smiled up at her.
“Go take this to Elise, please.” Mom handed her youngest a sippy cup full of milk.
“Okie dokie!” Suzie nodded.
“Thank you.”
“Yer welcome!”
She walked out of the kitchen, but before getting far...
“Hey Suzie...” Greg said, smiling and waving.
“Sorry Greggy, I gots’ta take dis to Elli.” She continued past him undeterred.
“I’ll give you a dollar if you lemme see it for a sec!”
She stopped in her tracks and turned around, looking conflicted.
“Mmm...dat’s not as cool as five bucks, but...okay!” She grinned.
“Thanks...” Greg took the sippy cup. “Be right back; stay here.”
“‘kay!”
Suzie cheerfully hummed to herself as her brother entered the downstairs bathroom, closing the door behind him. He searched the mirror cabinet, examining the various bottles and containers inside, until he came across the laxative pills. Sinisterly grinning all throughout, he took the lid off of the sippy cup, crushed one of the pills with his hands, and brushed its powdery remnants into the milk.
(Heh heh heh...let’s see how ya like this!)
Greg attached the lid back onto the cup, leaving the bathroom and handing it back to his sister.
“Here ya go,” he said.
“Greggy...” Suzie suspiciously eyed her big brother.
“What?” He looked annoyed.
“Did you take a sippy?” she asked.
“No.”
“Oh, goodie!” She smiled.
Suzie went upstairs, sippy cup in hand, as her brother followed her from a fair distance behind; she entered Elise’s room while Greg went into his.
“Here’s yer milk!” the younger sister said, handing it over.
“Thank you Suzie!” Elise replied, smiling and taking a sip.
“Yer welcome!”
Suzie left her sister’s room and entered her brother’s.
“Can I get my dollar now?” she whispered.
“Yup. Here ya go.” He handed her a $1 bill.
“Heh heh...I’m gonna be rich!” Suzie grinned, staring at the bill.
“Don’t get used to it.”
“Mmm-hmm.”
Greg was left to continue his homework, where he paid particularly close attention to his hearing.
(It should be workin’ any second...)
“Ohhhhhhhhhh...”
He mischievously smiled once he heard Elise groan in pain.
(And there it is...heh heh!)
Greg’s ears picked up his sister’s continued anguish, then her desperate footsteps towards the bathroom, and finally the disgusting sound that indicated her diaper’s purpose had been fulfilled.
“Oh, no...!” Elise lamented.
“Pfff!” Greg snickered, trying not to be heard.
“M-Mom...” She ashamedly called out. “I need you...”
“Coming...”
Mom came up the stairs, looking for her daughter.
“Elise? What’s...oh...”
She smelled the foul odor coming from Elise as, out of the young one’s control, another filthy noise was heard.
“Snnk! Heh heh heh...!” Greg continued to laugh under his breath.
“I-I’m sorry...!” Elise whined as Mom took her by the hand.
“It’s okay...you just need a change...”
Still enjoying himself, he leaned in his seat and saw the two walking toward Suzie’s room.
“I can’t believe this...” Elise spoke in embarrassment.
“It’s a good thing you’re wearing a diaper...” Mom said.
“I-I swear, I didn’t do it on purpose!”
“I know, sweetie...”
No more words were spoken between the two, until...
“...there...all clean again,” Mom said.
“Thank you...” Elise said, still sounding a little upset.
“You’re welcome...”
Once Greg heard his mother heading downstairs, he got up from his desk and entered the upstairs hallway.
“Hooh...” Elise sighed, rubbing her stomach.
“What’s wrong, sis?” he spoke, trying to sound innocent.
“I, um...n-needed changing...” She blushed.
“I thought you only wore diapers ‘cause they were comfy?”
“I...tried to go to the bathroom, but...I wasn’t fast enough...”
“Well, that’s what diapers are for, after all!” Greg chuckled.
Elise looked at him in irritation.
“Y’know...my tummy didn’t start hurting until after I drank that milk...”
“Really? Must’ve been expired or somethin’.” Greg shrugged.
“Or maybe--just taking a wild guess here--maybe the milk had laxatives in it!”
“Huh...you think Mom thought you were constipated?”
“I think someone thought it’d be funny if I pooped myself like a baby!”
Elise now angrily stared at her brother, who was not putting up as big of an act.
“Well, diapers are for people that can’t use the toilet, so you should be lucky that--”
“Just shut up, Greg!” she spat. “You’re lucky that I wouldn’t wish that on anyone, or I’d give you a double-dose!”
“I’m goin’ just fine, though, Elli. I don’t need it.” He smiled.
“Uuuugh!” Elise quickly returned to her room, unable to put up with Greg anymore.
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Greg sat on the living room couch, watching T.V. as he snacked away.
“Hey big brudder!” Suzie spoke as she walked up to him.
“What is it?” he replied, none-too-thrilled.
“Could’ja hold my sippy cup?” She handed it toward her brother.
“Um...why?”
“‘cause I hafta do somethin’ else with my hands.”
Reluctantly, Greg took the sippy cup with both hands.
“What?”
Without warning, Suzie forcefully pushed the bottom of the cup, and its contents splashed all over his upper body and face.
“Dis! Ha ha ha!”
“Suzie! Look what you did!” Greg irately replied.
“I am! You gots juice all over ya!” She grinned.
“What did you do?” Mom spoke as she entered the living room.
“Suzie spilled juice all over me!” Greg complained.
“Yeah, an’ it was funny!” Suzie giggled.
“No it’s not!”
“Suzie, don’t spill things on purpose,” Mom reprimanded.
“I sorry...” Suzie frowned, looking ashamed.
“At least you didn’t get a lot on the couch...”
“But now I hafta change!” Greg griped.
“Not before I get the juice off your face...” Mom quickly went into the kitchen.
Greg looked around, no longer as mad, and noticed the sippy cup lid lying on the floor near the cup. Suzie, smiling, walked up to her brother and began to lick his face.
“Augh! Stop!”
“Woof! Ruff!”
“That’s gross! Knock it off!” Greg recoiled away from his sister.
“Yeah, Suzie. You don’t know where he’s been...”
Elise commented with a smirk as she walked toward the backyard.
“I’m not that dirty!”
“You don’ taste dirty...” Suzie smiled.
“Thanks, I guess...” Greg sighed.
“Yer welcome!”
Mom came back and wiped her son’s face with a wet kitchen towel, then removed his drenched shirt and wiped his upper chest.
“That should do it...”
“Thanks, Mom.” Greg slightly smiled.
“Of course, sweetheart.” She smiled as well.
“I’ll go get a new shirt...”
As Mom cleaned the small juice stains on the couch, her son went upstairs and into his room, opening the shirt drawer of his dresser.
“What?!”
To his shock and horror, all of his shirts were gone, and in their place was a solitary, pink, frilly dress.
“Where’d my clothes go?!” Greg exclaimed.
“They should be in your dresser!” Mom answered from downstairs.
“They’re not! They’re all gone!”
Suzie entered the room, gasping in joy when she saw what remained in the shirt drawer.
“Now you really are a big sissy! Hee hee hee!”
“I’m not wearing that stupid dress, Suzie!” Greg angrily replied.
“Aw, c’mon big brudder! You’ll look great!”
“I’ll look dumb!”
“Dat too! Great an’ dumb!” Suzie continued to giggle.
“Grrrrr...I’m not gonna do it!”
Greg swiftly walked out of his room and into Elise’s, going through her dresser.
“Here too?!”
One of the drawers he searched was completely empty, and there were no shirts to be found in any of the other drawers.
“Elli’s pretty smart, huh?” Suzie commented.
“Elli’s also gonna get hers! She’s gone too far!”
He was about to go downstairs, but encountered Mom before he could.
“Please put a shirt on, Greg.”
“Elli took all of my shirts! An’ there’s none in her dresser either!”
“C’mon, Greggy! Wear the dressy!” Suzie spoke.
“No!”
She giggled once more, before being picked up by Mom.
“You’re going into time-out for what you did.” Mom did not look (or sound) pleased.
“D’oh...fine...” Suzie sighed with a disappointed frown.
“I’ll see if I can find something for you...” Mom said to Greg as she went downstairs.
“Yeah...”
Still fuming, he also went downstairs, and out into the backyard.
“Wow, you’re really getting into this whole baby thing, eh?” Elise remarked as her nearly-naked (yet still-diapered) brother approached.
“Shut up! I’ve had it with your pranks!” He clenched his fists.
“C’mon, Greg...have a sense of humor!” She smiled.
“I already have one, an’ I still don’t think it’s funny!”
“Then maybe you just have a bad sense of humor.” Elise smirked.
“What’s your problem?!” Greg began to shake in anger. “Hiding my diapers, makin’ me change Suzie, an’ now tryin’ to get me to wear that dress...enough is enough!”
“Hey, don’t act like the victim!” His sister now glared back at him, pointing an accusatory finger. “Your worm and laxative pranks were just as uncalled for!”
“I only did that as payback! We were even both times, but you just couldn’t leave me alone!”
“Like I’m really gonna let you get away with that!”
The two were infuriatedly staring at one another in the late afternoon sun, standing so close that their noses nearly touched.
“What the heck gives you the right to pick on me?!” Greg angrily asked.
“I dunno, take your pick! You’re the oldest, you think you’re so much better for being first, you’re bad at math, and you still wear diapers like a little baby!”
“Don’t act like you’re any better Miss Poopypants!”
“That was your fault, Greg!”
“Because you made me change Suzie’s disgusting diaper!”
“I wasn’t gonna change her!”
“It was your turn!”
“I don’t care!”
Their teeth were visible and tightly clenched as they trembled with rage, circling each other with their angry eyes locked onto one another.
“You’re not exactly squeaky-clean either, Elli!” Greg accused.
“Compared to you I am!”
“Really?! That smug look you keep giving me, the pretending-to-be-innocent crap, it drives me crazy!”
“You did the same thing, Greg!”
“But you started it!”
“And you could’a just let it go!”
“An’ let you keep prankin’ me?! No way!”
They continued to stare each other down and circle one another, fury etched onto their faces.
“Well Greg, it’s your turn, isn’t it?” Elise spoke, smirking once again.
“Yeah...an’ I’ve got a real good prank for ya...” He deviously smiled.
“Ooh! By all means, sissy-boy, bring it on!”
“Don’t...call me that...” Anger began building up inside him.
“Sissy, boy. You like wearin’ that pink diaper, ‘cause you haven’t taken it off yet, and I bet deep down, you really, really wanna wear that dress I left ya.”
“I...don’t...!”
“It’s okay, sissy-boy. I won’t judge you...out loud.”
Greg bit his lip, his fists so tightly clenched that his nails dug into his palms. Briefly looking down, he saw a little stone at his feet.
“I...I dare you to call me that...one more time,” he said, giving his most intense stare at Elise.
“Gladly! Sissy! Boy!”
“That’s it!”
In one swift motion, Greg reached down to grab the stone and, as hard as he could, threw it right at Elise’s head. She managed to barely dodge it by leaning to the side, feeling it wiz past her ear...
...and it landed right smackdab in the middle of Suzie’s forehead, knocking her onto her back.
“Oh my God!” Elise quickly placed her hands over her mouth and nose, eyes wide open in shock.
“Ah...wha...?!” Greg’s mouth was agape as a sickening, chilling dread spread throughout his body, inside and out.
“Is...is she...?!”
Elise rushed over to the still-lying Suzie, and the older girl gasped: Blood trailed down the smallest’s forehead and past her nose.
“Suzie! Please wake up!” Elise desperately called out as she shook her sister, tears welling up.
“Mmmm...nnnnnn...”
Suzie’s eyes, though closed, showed signs of movement; the rest of her body slightly shifted as well.
“Good...you’re alive...” The older girl smiled in relief as a tear crawled down both of her cheeks.
“I...I’m sorry...” Greg spoke, still numb.
“You could’ve killed her, Greg!” Elise angrily shouted, approaching him with hateful, wet eyes.
“I...I didn’ mean...”
“WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!”
Suzie’s deafening cry forced her two siblings to put their hands over their ears.
“I-I’m more worried about Mom killin’ me!” he tried to speak above the wailing.
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“What has gotten into you two?!”
Mom had Greg and Elise sit on the living room couch as she furiously stared at her two older children, who both hung their heads in shame.
“Don’t think I don’t know what you two have been up to! Ever since you guys came home you’ve practically been at each other’s throats!”
“She started it!” Greg accused, pointing at Elise.
“And you could’a stopped it!” she retorted.
“And that’s why you’re both in big trouble!” Mom replied.
“But I didn’t throw the stone!” Elise argued.
“It doesn’t matter! You’re both acting like you’re babies again! If I had known this would happen, I’d have never kept you guys in diapers!”
“I-I was just playin’ around! He wouldn’t get over it!” Elise pointed at Greg.
“‘cause I can’t stand it!”
“I’m not the one that hurt Suzie!”
“You forced me!”
“Enough!”
Mom’s infuriated tone silenced the two of them.
“This is exactly what I’m talking about! Why can’t you two just stop bickering?!”
“I...I’m sorry...” Greg sadly spoke.
“Sorry isn’t going to take it back! Do you realize you could have killed your sister with that rock?!”
“...yes...yes...!” Tears fell from his face.
“Greg...” Mom began to tear up as well.
“I...I dunno what else to say, Mommy...I-I-I’m sorry...!”
Greg began to sob, trying his best to dry his cheeks with his hands. Elise silently cried as well, as Mom hugged her son.
“It’s all my fault!” he said, muffled from the embrace. “I shouldn’t’a done that stuff to Elli!”
“...it’s my fault, too...” Elise sorrowfully replied, entering the hug. “I shouldn’t have kept pushing you more and more!”
“But...I-I was the one that almost...I’m so sorry!”
The two children continued to cry in Mom’s arms as tears trailed down her cheeks as well.
“Guys...please promise me you’ll never do this again,” Mom eventually spoke.
“I...I won’, Mommy...I promise...” Greg quietly answered.
“I-I promise too...” Elise did as well.
“Thank you...”
The hug continued in silence for a few more seconds before Mom let go of her children.
“Now...to make absolutely sure this doesn’t happen again, I’m going to have to punish you two.”
“Are...are we grounded?” Greg said.
“Worse: No diapers for a month.”
“What?!” “That long?!” Both Greg and Elise’s mouths were wide open, eyes widened in shock.
“It’s the least you deserve for what you’ve done. Now take them off.”
Mom handed her two kids their underwear, and while the son went behind the couch to change, the daughter just frowned.
“Um...is it okay if I keep it on for a little longer? In case...”
All three of them heard Elise’s tummy gurgle, and she looked somewhat pained.
“Alright. Once the laxative has left your system, you can take yours off.”
“Thanks...” Elise sadly smiled.
“Here...” Greg, now clad in underwear, handed his mother his still-clean pink diaper.
“Thank you.”
“Um, did’ja find my shirts?”
“They were in Suzie’s closet. Both your shirts and Elise’s.”
Greg looked at his sister, somewhat impressed.
“Huh...not a bad hiding spot...”
“I hid your diapers in the garage, by the way,” Elise spoke.
“But I already checked there...” Mom replied.
“Um...I hid ‘em real good...” Her daughter blushed, grinning. “I took ‘em out of the package and put ‘em with Greg’s baby stuff...”
“Jeez...you really went all out!” Greg said, chuckling.
“Heh heh...well, it’s not like you can wear them right now...”
“I know...” He sighed.
“Here you go.” Mom handed Greg matching blue pajama shorts and shirt.
“Thanks.” He began to put it on, pants first.
“Mom...if you knew what we were up to, why didn’t you stop us?” Elise asked.
“Because I had hoped you two were old enough to know better, but obviously that’s not the case.”
“Oh...well, next time, could you do something before...y’know...”
“I will, and you’ll be punished accordingly.”
“Mmmmm...” Elise and Greg looked at one another, frightened.
“Now, please behave yourselves for the rest of the night.”
“We will,” the two simultaneously said.
“Good.” Mom smiled, kissing them on the forehead.
“Heh heh...” Greg blushed.
“Mmm...” Elise smiled.
The two left the living room and headed upstairs, walking side-by-side.
“Greg...I’m sorry for what I did,” Elise sincerely said.
“An’ I’m sorry for what I did...” Greg frowned.
“I’ll try not to go overboard next time...”
“Yeah...wait, next time?!”
“Yeah. What, you think I’m gonna stop pickin’ on you just because you chucked a rock at Suzie’s head?” She smirked.
“Yeah, kinda!” Greg looked at her in irritation.
“Well too bad!” Elise chuckled.
“Mmmm...well, I’ll try not to do anything stupid when I get my revenge...”
“Or you could, I dunno, not do anything?”
“Nah. That’s not my style...”
“Hope you like bein’ diaperless!” Elise nudged her brother with a smirk.
“Hey, you will be too!” Greg smirked and nudged back.
The two laughed together as they entered Suzie’s room.
“Hey guys!”
She ran up to her older siblings; the youngest had a patch of gauze attached to her wound.
“Hey. Good to see you’re okay!” Elise said.
“I’m more’n okay, sis, I’m great! Jus’ wait ‘til I show ev’ryone at daycare my scar! Dey’re gonna t’ink I’m so cool!”
“Heh heh...” Greg nervously laughed. “Um, sorry for throwin’ that rock at you...”
“It’s okay, big brudder! It kinda hurts, but I gots a cool scar ‘cause’a you!” Suzie grinned.
“But...I could’a sent you to the hospital...” He frowned.
“But’cha didn’t! I’m okay!”
Suzie gave her brother a tight hug, and he returned it.
“Love you Greggy...”
“Same to you, Suzie...”
Elise embraced the two of them.
“I love you guys too!”
“Heh heh...l-love you too, sis...” Greg blushed and smiled.
“Love you too, Elli!”
The three parted from the hug.
“So...when can I start prankin’ you guys?” Suzie asked.
“Never,” Greg replied.
“You’re just sayin’ that ‘cause you don’t want me an’ Suzie ganging up on you!” Elise chuckled.
“D-Darn right!” He blushed again.
“Hee hee! Don’ worry, Greggy, I’ll make sure to prank Elli too!”
“Just...try not to throw any rocks, okay?” Greg said.
“Awww...I wanna give you guys scars too!” Suzie frowned.
“I think we’re good...” He turned to Elise.
“Yeah...” The older girl nodded in agreement.
Here's my first shot at a story. I hope it's not terrible...
Feel free to tell me what works and what doesn't. I'm planning on writing more stories, so any constructive criticism is welcome!
Feel free to tell me what works and what doesn't. I'm planning on writing more stories, so any constructive criticism is welcome!
I'll say this much, this could've been worse. The grammar isn't bad. Nothing wrong jumped out at me in particular. I just wish I had a bit more background on these characters. I look forward to seeing more from you in the future.
EDIT: I say that, and after looking at a couple of your other stories, you quickly proved my assumption that you had potential correct. You've earned yourself a watcher. I'll have to catch up on your other works sometime.
EDIT: I say that, and after looking at a couple of your other stories, you quickly proved my assumption that you had potential correct. You've earned yourself a watcher. I'll have to catch up on your other works sometime.
This was my first story, so it's not as good as my later stuff...though I haven't yet reached the point where I'm ashamed of it! I have been writing a story explaining why the kids are still in diapers, though it's been on the backburner for a while.
Thank you for watching! Hope you enjoy my stories!
Thank you for watching! Hope you enjoy my stories!
I know what that's like. I've been writing this one story for a little over 2 years at this point. It's only on part 5. Patience is a virtue, and writer's block can be a curse. I look forward to reading more of your stories. It's technically not my first story, but my first one has no place in this community so I'm keeping it to myself.
Tit for Tat isn't technically my first story either; I wrote a story for myself back in 2013-2014, and I have no plans on ever submitting it anywhere. The Word files are still on my hard drive, as a reminder of where I came from.
Good luck with your story!
Good luck with your story!
Why are they in diapers in the first place? It's very out of place to put older kids in diapers for seemingly no reason.
I would also recommend better use of body language and adverbs to describe speech than a simple smile or groan. You can convey a lot of meaning that way. Example:
“Wet go Keeyokko,” said the young Sayaka, softly kicking her feet as she hoisted herself onto the precarious tip of the couch. When she finally reached the top, she tumbled down towards the seat, resting on it with the side of her head.
You end up setting a tone, show some action, and give the reader a clue as to what is really going on with the character, what they might be feeling.
I would also recommend better use of body language and adverbs to describe speech than a simple smile or groan. You can convey a lot of meaning that way. Example:
“Wet go Keeyokko,” said the young Sayaka, softly kicking her feet as she hoisted herself onto the precarious tip of the couch. When she finally reached the top, she tumbled down towards the seat, resting on it with the side of her head.
You end up setting a tone, show some action, and give the reader a clue as to what is really going on with the character, what they might be feeling.
There is a backstory to Greg and Elise still being in diapers, which I will submit in the near future. It does seem out-of-place and kind-of tacked on here, I admit, but I also think it's not completely unimportant to the story.
I'm still new at writing, and I'm looking to improve. I want to read some of the other stories in the community and hopefully learn a thing or two. Whose stories would you recommend I check out?
I'm still new at writing, and I'm looking to improve. I want to read some of the other stories in the community and hopefully learn a thing or two. Whose stories would you recommend I check out?
ReinaHW is pretty good, some of Toddlergirl's older material wasn't bad. Good writers are hard to come by here because of the "how many times can I write diaper on a page" syndrome that plagues DA.
It wasn't bad at all. I like the concept of the mom being cool with her kids wearing diapers for comfort. It seems like a story that might take place twenty or thirty years from now when society has become more comfortable with the idea of people liking diapers as a form of underwear. Also, that was a good idea the mom had to take away their diapers for a month as punishment.
It was a decent story and I couldn't stop reading till the end and that moment Greg threw the rock was quick a change in pace. I knew he was angry, but man, talk about a curve ball as far as the story went. I never saw that happening because of how polite they were to their mother. Over all they seem like good kids, but having a younger sister like Elise would drive me crazy too.
I say you did a really good job with this story and you weren't kidding about dialog rich stories. If you master some descriptions here and there you could be a very great writer.
It was a decent story and I couldn't stop reading till the end and that moment Greg threw the rock was quick a change in pace. I knew he was angry, but man, talk about a curve ball as far as the story went. I never saw that happening because of how polite they were to their mother. Over all they seem like good kids, but having a younger sister like Elise would drive me crazy too.
I say you did a really good job with this story and you weren't kidding about dialog rich stories. If you master some descriptions here and there you could be a very great writer.
I didn't really specify when it takes place, but I tend to assume it's during current-day. I have a backstory about why the kids still wear diapers, which I will probably write.
I really do like the end part. Something I've always thought when seeing images of punishment and revenge is, "this could easily spiral out-of-control and get ugly". Having it escalate to the point of severe consequences shows that the back-and-forth pranking isn't really worth it. And it's a decent moral as well...hopefully I wasn't completely unsubtle with it.
I really am best at dialogue, but descriptions are still an issue with me. I tend to just describe what is necessary, and leave the rest to the imagination; that's because I always fear that I'm going to violate the "Show, don't tell" rule. I think once I read some other stories, I'll have a better grasp at it.
Thank you for the input!
I really do like the end part. Something I've always thought when seeing images of punishment and revenge is, "this could easily spiral out-of-control and get ugly". Having it escalate to the point of severe consequences shows that the back-and-forth pranking isn't really worth it. And it's a decent moral as well...hopefully I wasn't completely unsubtle with it.
I really am best at dialogue, but descriptions are still an issue with me. I tend to just describe what is necessary, and leave the rest to the imagination; that's because I always fear that I'm going to violate the "Show, don't tell" rule. I think once I read some other stories, I'll have a better grasp at it.
Thank you for the input!
Do you still plan on writing that backstory, or has the idea been scrapped in favor of sumthin else?
I'm just curious, you're the writer so it's entirely up to you if this ever happens.
I'm just curious, you're the writer so it's entirely up to you if this ever happens.
The backstory is definitely coming. I just got caught up with a bunch of other things that I never got around to finishing it...
Oh no worries, your RL and writing prefs etc come first, I'm just happy to get an answer hehe ^_^.
Another good idea besides a backstory into why they're still wearing diapers, is perhaps a sequel where Suzie gets her revenge?
She may only be a little 4 year old girl, but I'm sure she can be very smart and conniving/sneaky too.
She may only be a little 4 year old girl, but I'm sure she can be very smart and conniving/sneaky too.

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